Her

[Riley 13,064]

Im going to try writing fiction but I'm not the most experienced so I'm really sorry if this is bad. Thanks for clicking though🙂

 

All I could think about was her, Emily. Her gorgeous red hair and the way it waved in The wind. Her shimmering blue eyes that radiated in the sunlight. Her intoxicating laugh which infected everyone around her. She was, perfect. 

Then there was me. Your average blonde crumpling under stress and just trying to make it in this world. I was just Emma. 

We were very close friends and well one day, thinks changed. It all started here:

I was supposed to meet Emily at the library to study but couldn't figure out what to wear. I put on a dress and it was way to formal, I tried jean shorts and seemed too attention grabbing. I settled on something really basic. Light Jeans and a t-shirt. I dressed and started doing my hair getting increasingly nervous as I tried to not look like a mess. 

I grabbed a large water bottle and my laptop and started driving to the library. It was a large building entirely made of glass with levels and levels of books. But also some pretty nice quiet places to study. 

I walked in and found Emily and immediately started blushing. Out of nerves I started drinking s lot and soon had drank my entire water bottle. We went and found a place to sit down and started going over various work with eachother and I got increasingly more awkward and nervous as I felt like I just wanted to scream out, "I like you!" But then I noticed that she was blushing too and an inkling of a thought made me wonder....  

At one point we both didn't really know what to say and I awkwardly brushed my hair behind my face and we both started laughing for no reason and then met eyes and just made a connection. 

After a while it was starting to get late and Emily asked if I wanted to keep studying at her apartment so we could make food, or that we could go somewhere. She kind of blundered over her words while saying everything. I said it would be really nice if she wanted to keep studying at her apartment. 

We both got up and I told her that I was going to use the bathroom before we left and she awkwardly asked, "what if you waited just a little while." 

"Sure," I said a little confused but obviously complient.

I started driving to her apartment and felt my bladder kind of aching trying to get me to stop and pee. I wasn't desperate but I definitely needed to pee. 

Once I got to her apartment I asked if it was ok if I got some water and well I ended up drinking a fair amount, she seemed to take special interest over that. 

We both kind fo stood there awkwardly at first until we both pulled our laptops out and put pasta on the stove. (We were both kind of broke) 

We both got more and more awkward while studying and started paying way more attention to eachother and eventually I felt one of her fingers warp around one of mine and my heart jumped. I couldn't believe it. We mind of looked at eachother smiling but both blushing and still really awkward. 

The moment as small as it could seem lasted for what seemed like an eternity. It was amazing.

Unfortunately my bladder decided to, at that moment, remind me of it's existence. Now at this time I was really desperate to pee and my bladder reminded me of that. I clenched my legs together and admitted to Emily that I really had to go. 

"I should probably tell you about something," she said like she was afraid how I would react.

"What is it?," I said trying to be caring but feeling my bladder trying to let go.

"I'm kind of into.... Peeing," she said not making eye contact with me. 

In my mind all the pieces kind of meshed together. Ever since we were little she always seemed to be interested when someone had to pee. I mean I also was but she especially was and as we grew older I noticed she would sometimes avoid the bathroom when she obviously had to go. 

"Do you hate me?" She said kind of concerned

"No, why would I hate you for that!" I responded actually a little curious as to what this interest pertained. 

"I could always try it, if you want," I said blushing very intensley

Her eyes widened and she said, "You would do that for me!"

"Of course!" I said now more interested.

She thought for a second before saying, "How about, the bathroom is off limits for thirty minutes." She said obviously very excited. 

"I have to go a little but to catch up to you I'll drink some," she said running into the kitchen and drinking water glasses very very quickly. 

I felt a tiny leak escape out of me and crossedy legs and bent my knees for a second to hold it. 

We continued studying and I progressively got very very desperate and started leaking little bits but I noticed Emily was also starting to clench her legs together.

"I don't know if I can make it," I told her as my bladder was screaming.

"You can, just 20 more minutes!"

Seeing the time I grabbed myself to hold it in longer. 

I felt s long spurt escape and a wet spot formed in my crotch and my friend noticed and smiled a little. At this point my bladder was screaming for relief and it took every once of will in my body to hold it in. I kept leaking trying to hold it until it just came out.

I felt my bladder just give out and a hissing noise erupted from inside my jeans and my wet spot started rapidly growing. 

"I can't stop it!" I said quite panicked. 

She looked absolutely thrilled by this and was grinning. 

My stream finally started to slow and then eventually stopped. I was super embarrassed and just didn't know what to do but it also felt amazing.

"I am so so so sorry" I said profusely apologizing.

Before I could say anything else Emily's crotch turned a shade darker and a wet spot rapidly grew and spread down her jeans. I didn't know what to say but my embarrassment lifted. Her stream finally stopped and the hissing subsided.

"So.. how did it feel?" She asked.

"Actually...... Amazing," I said almost a little in shock with myself. 

Emily practically leapt on my and hugged me. I could almost feel her through the wet fabric of our jeans. 

She offered me a pair of sweatpants and we put our wet clothes in a pile. By the end I had to pee again and was about to go into the bathroom when I turned around and asked, "Do you want to join me?"

And she graciously accepted.

 

I'm sorry I'm ending the story here but if you want me to write more let me know and I will! Thanks for reading this far and I'm sorry to end it on a cliffhanger but I kind of need to go somewhere so I'm sorry. Thank you again for reading!

 

 

[Dr.P 1,473]

Riley,
Great start on writing fiction! Congratulations! The situation is totally believable, and the dialog is engaging, and very real. I love the cliffhanger ending, too. It fills me with anticipation of what may happen in a sequel, and makes me want to read it, which is exactly what a good ending should do. No need to apologize for that, at all. I think that many readers will be looking forward to a sequel. I am one of them. Congratulations again, Riley. A great start!

xx,
Dr.P

[Riley 13,064]

9 minutes ago, Dr.P said:

Raven,
Great start on writing fiction! Congratulations! The situation is totally believable, and the dialog is engaging, and very real. I love the cliffhanger ending, too. It fills me with anticipation of what may happen in a sequel, and makes me want to read it, which is exactly what a good ending should do. No need to apologize for that, at all. I think that many readers will be looking forward to a sequel. I am one of them. Congratulations again, Raven. A great start!

xx,
Dr.P

Thank you so much!!! That means the world to me 🙂 

[Dr.P 1,473]

4 minutes ago, Riley said:

Thank you so much!!! That means the world to me 🙂

You're very welcome! 🙂

[gldenwetgoose 21,489]

Love it Raven - perfect!

[Pissdrinker 874]

Love, love, love this Raven!  You have a talent for writing. Please, please keep at it. Obviously being selfish mostly here 😀

Emily & Emma!! Love this! Great start and love the cliffhanger. What is the title if this one going to be? 

Plenty of scope for future adventures and back story.

THIS:  

At one point we both didn't really know what to say and I awkwardly brushed my hair behind my face and we both started laughing for no reason and then met eyes and just made a connection. 

Wow! This is talent. Love how you are capturing the initial thrill.

And this is so erotic, MMM!!! 

felt my bladder just give out and a hissing noise erupted from inside my jeans and my wet spot started rapidly growing. 

"I can't stop it!" I said quite panicked

OK. I’m hard so that box is ticked too! 

Please, please, please  keep up your writing 😀

[Alfresco 11,631]

@Riley, You definitely have a way with words and can set up good imagery, leading the reader to imagine the scene and you moved the story along at a good pace, giving just enough detail.   An excellent start to fiction - you certainly should write more.  I enjoyed reading it.