Camping

[WWE pee 24]

Ok I’m a noob to this but I am going to write a story I don’t know if this is were you write stories but uhh. Again I’m a noob so sorry but let’s start with this FICTION story 

I woke up this morning feeling TERRIBLE. Not in the sick way or feeling bad for something but I just felt kind of like a bad person for some odd  reason. Then I remembered I was going camping today and I had to pack. So I grabbed what I needed for this 3 day camping adventure! So I got out of bed grabbed a few shirts and some denim shorts and a couple bras and panties and some sweat pants and jeans I also grabbed some food since I was camping with my friends Carmella Lacey and Morgan. I did not use the bathroom that morning cause I thought I would be fine and there would probably be a portable potty. So I did not worry about that. Lacey said she was gonna pick me up and bring me so I had to get ready cause she just texted me when is was getting ready she was almost at my house so I had to get my butt ready and fast. I picked up the cheap brush and brush my hair and brushed my teeth. Then I sat on the couch watching then I saw Lacey’s white car pull up in the second Driveway of my small house “Hey Bayley!” Said Lacey as she had her big grin with her pearly white teeth peering threw her smile and her red lipstick perfectly applied. “Hey Lacey! I am so excited about camping!” Lacey smiled “Well get your butt in here and we’ll get going sooner” Well I listened and hopped in the car with no hesitation. She drove up to the campsite and I get excited cause I was a outdoors girl. I opened the door of the car and my Friend Morgan jumped up off the hammock that was connected to the trees and hugged me tightly “Hey Baby!” She kissed me on the cheek. And no me and Morgan are not dating but that’s just her way of saying hello and calling people “Babe” or “Honey” and stuff like that but anyways. I smiled at her and then Carmella comes out of no where yelling “Let’s show you around our camping area!” And btw we were in the middle of the woods by a lake. She showed me the tent the fire and there was a little umbrella set up with a cooler and a table. But then I asked where the bathroom was. Carmella frowned a little bit “we don’t have one” she said. I was kind of shocked but I peed outside all the time just take my pants down squat and let the pee come out as it makes a little river down the dirt. But anyways let’s skip to little bit later. I started really having to go to the bathroom so I asked the girls to excuse me. I ran behind a tree that had bushes cover it. I was about to pull my pants down but then Carmella and Lacey came running yelling “We have to go to” then following Morgan saying “Me too I have to pee!” But then we realized if we took a squat we would get dirty and get stabbed which sound ridiculous but there were a lot of plants so yeah. Then Carmella said “we could pee standing up” “WERE NOT MEN WE DONT HAVE A PENIS” said Lacey “She has a point” said Morgan “Let’s just try” I add. “Well ok” say Lacey and Morgan as we pull our panties down. Carmella spreads out her Vagina with her fingers all copy. “Ready?” Asked Carmella “Yes” we all say. We let out a big gush of pee and soak the tree we were standing in front of with pee. Lacey started giggling “Haha it’s like a garden hose” said Lacey over her giggling “Yeah Peeing standing up is fun” said Carmella “Next time we should pee in the lake when we go swimming” said Morgan “Im down” we all say. We all finished up our peeing and take our fingers off our Vagina’s and pull up our panties. Then that’s how we peed for the rest of the trip. 
 

I hope you liked the story sorry if there are spelling issues I am really tired while making this story but I hope you enjoyed sorry if it did not have enough detail but I tried. I will try to make another story soon. Bye!

[CON2H4 650]

You need to learn to break up your story into paragraphs.

[oliver2 4,418]

1 hour ago, CON2H4 said:

You need to learn to break up your story into paragraphs.

OR: write in the style of Jack Kerouac

[gldenwetgoose 21,486]

Let's be constructive here....    That story had some great elements - I loved the idea of running out of the house without peeing, then finding out there weren't toilets at the camp. And the idea of the girls all peeing together, especially standing is heaven.

If you did break it into two or three paragraphs it would be a little easier to read.  Also, when it's in one like that there is the tendency to think it's too long and start cutting short. If it was broken up a little, perhaps there's the opportunity to then add it a little more detail which will build it overall into an absolute epic.

[WWE pee 24]

Thank you I am sorry I am not very detailed into my writing as I have not really sat down and written a full book all at once but I will put multiple paragraphs next time thank you!

[daemoniak 614]

On 12/28/2020 at 7:06 AM, WWE pee said:

Thank you I am sorry I am not very detailed into my writing as I have not really sat down and written a full book all at once but I will put multiple paragraphs next time thank you!

Don't worry, we all have to start somewhere.

Personally I recommend reading @lesley's stories, with a specific focus on the pee scenes. They always mesmerized me, and I studied them to improve my own writing, realizing that she was alternating between rich physical descriptions and state-of-mind/reactions giving real depth to the scene.