Brutus

@Maggie_555

As Steve said, no need to apologize for where the conversation went. Sometimes, interesting topics just spring up and people have interesting input to offer. Just because it's not laser focused on pee doesn't mean the hammer needs to come down. I've come across many threads on this site that just don't interest me so I simply leave, it's easy to find other threads on this forum, no need to correct the conversation taking place. It's nice to chat a little with like minded fetishists about random things from time to time. Plus this thread is about mean things done with pee so it's not a stretch that conversations about mean people in general will find footing here. 

Plenty of questions here to choose from. Some things I've always wondered, ladies. When out in a public restroom, whether at work, stores, events, etc. do you ever listen closely as other women in adjacent stalls pee? Do you notice if they are peeing particularly hard or light trickle? Do you notice that if certain age groups or body types pee differently? Do you notice the women that don't wipe, flush or wash their hands or know any female co-workers with poor restroom etiquette? Lastly, ever known for sure which woman left a mess in a stall? 

Guys, ever walked by a women's room and heard peeing or had women tell you restroom stories?

Thanks to whoever chimes in.

Some here have pointed out that naughty peeing often involves leaving a mess for others to clean. I'll address this in particular. While this is true, I don't know that it should be singled out in relation to a pee fetish. Most people have left a mess in some way for another person to clean. At my job, for example, the smokers always throw their butts on the ground for our cleaning crew instead of the garbage can 3 feet away. People leave sodas on the ground in the Walmart parking lot, as well as shopping carts rolling around for employees to chase because they're too lazy to return them to the bin. My point is that even non-pee fetishists often have no concern for any burdens they create on others. To take this to a massive scale, we all use things that are made in 3rd world country slave labor conditions but is that stopping any of us from buying smart phones, TV's or nice clothes? Not at all, we love our luxuries. Most women love diamonds but do they care that children die mining them under the barrel of a gun in Africa? Not at all, they want shiny jewels.

The desire to please ourselves is usually stronger than the misery it will create for others, especially if we don't have to confront these people. Maggie_555's post backs this up. The cognitive dissonance is in all of us. As someone said here, its a balancing act. For me, seeing women peeing in a naughty way, in or on something that they shouldn't be is a huge turn on to me. It's something about pee specifically. Seeing a woman spit or pour her drink in a similar naughty way does nothing for me to cause arousal. First, It's the fact that her pee is from her private area, that alone adds a sexual element. Second, urine inherently has no value to us, it is literally waste material the body is getting rid of. Because of this, whatever is a receptacle for urine is automatically in a position of inferiority, which places the woman taking a piss in a position of superiority over it and power is sexy. Pee is sort of a display of power, which is why a woman taking a standing piss is hugely erotic to most men. Additionally, a urination gives you a lot to see. A big stream, the puddle it creates, its really the only thing that comes out of that part of her in such a bold and stimulating visual way. It's an ultimate power display through her genitals. It is as if she is implying that whatever she is pissing on has no worth to her other than collecting what her sexy parts spit out.

So for those who have moral qualms about naughty peeing as a burden to others, I'm just trying to explain all the elements at play here that cause many of us to enjoy it anyway. The urethra being in a woman's sexual area, the weak position of whatever is peed on, seeing her legs spread or ass bent over makes it a highly arousing sexual display, at least to heterosexual men. Add in the fact that for me, there is nothing sexy about watching myself pee. It's just me and I'm not attracted to me. But watching a hot woman do it, totally different arena. Very difficult to object to that many arousing elements. Hope this helped. 

@Maggie_555

Yeah I find it disturbing that people get excited watching a living being of any species suffering and being killed. There is something wrong in their brain. Another thing to consider is that many women will internalize their mans behavior out of love, such as ignoring that he is doing inappropriate things to her kids because she loves him do much. I know a woman who had close friends of many races and became a racist herself and stopped talking to them because she fell in love with a white supremacist. So maybe your friend likes the snake eating live animals because her husband does. 

I eat meat and in a survival situation I would kill an animal to avoid starving and so would vegetarians if it was a matter of life and death. But would I enjoy killing it, absolutely not. Kill it quick and eat it. Modern day guns have made it so easy and 1st world people don't experience the true challenge of hunting with spears and persistence the way ancient man did. Many people just have a blood lust. Ever seen how folks react at rodeos when goats get trampled by horses and have to be carried out? They don't react at all. Sick people in the world. Everyone here is kinda sick too by societies standards but we're sick in a harmless way. I mean come on, we're peefans, no harm there!!

Urine of the Goddesses chapter 1- Empress Glendella

Recap: On planet Estress, a parasite, EvePoxia X, makes women produce more urine when having sex. Men need womens pee to keep the parasite from killing them, in turn making womens urine an invaluable item.

(see intro for details)

Supreme Empress Glendella: I choose....this one....Jim McGash, a farmer. Hmm, only 18 years old but his record indicates he has a 9 inch penis. He will have the chance to receive my royal piss and kill the parasite.

Queen Leah: As your little sister I have a duty to remind you he is 18, merely a boy. Surely he will not last long enough to withstand your ravenous sexuality, Glendella. You will have to condemn him to death, as he will surely fail you.

Empress: I truly fail to see how his well being is any concern of mine, Leah. I simply desire his beautiful member and I demand it. Send the guards to retrieve him in the morning at once. I crave satisfying sex with him as soon as possible.

The next morning, 2 armed female guards bearing the royal armor arrive at Jim's home in the woods.

Guard: Jim McGash? You are hereby called to the royal palace for the sexual services and urinary cleansing of the Supreme Empress Glendella. Please come with us.

Jim: Heavens, is it true? She really wants ...me? Yes lets go!

Jim, not realizing the danger he is in, eagerly leaves with the guards. After a 30 minute ride to the Grand Royal Palace, they arrive. The guards escort Jim to a small exam room and tell him to await the empress's arrival. 35 agonizing minutes later, he sees the door open and in walks Glendella herself, Supreme Empress and ruler of the planet. There she stands, towering 3 inches over him, barefoot, wearing only a red silk knee length transparent robe. Her huge breasts and thick curly bush are clearly visible through the material. She has long black hair, a shapely voluptuous figure and is covered in oil, making her olive tan skin shine with beauty. Her presence is jaw-dropping and Jim now knows he cannot handle her. She sits down, crosses her sexy legs and lights a cigarette. Through a thick puff of smoke she says with her loud voice “I want to see the penis, pants down, right now.” Feeling truly unsettled at this point, he obliges.

Empress: OHHH MY GODDESS ABOVE, IT IS MAGNIFICENT!! My pussy aches for it already. Now THAT is a fucking dick worthy of my urine! We are all set for tomorrow evening. Should you satisfy me you'll receive my parasite curing piss straight from the source. Now, you will gaze upon my phenomenal physical assets.

The empress stands up and walks up him, leaving a greasy imprint of her ass cheeks and pussy on the chair. She unties her robe and exposes her full oily anatomy to Jim. She presses her body against his. The oil from her breasts coats his face, her semi erect nipples caress his forehead and the strong musky smell radiating from her cavernous pussy grips his nose as her bush tickles his stomach. She looks down at her pussy and touches it gently, moaning quietly. Jim is in disbelief that the grandest pussy of the land is right in front of him, fully exposed. Very few men get this close to her mighty anatomy.

Empress: Now you shall gaze upon my golden trickle. Witness what awaits you.

Glendella puts her hand under her pussy and slowly pushes, letting just a little pee emerge from her urethra and fall into her open hand. She puts it close to Jim's face. He looks at it, amazed by the bright gold color and potent smell radiating from the small puddle she holds in her hand. His mouth waters and he reaches out for it. The empress quickly moves her hand away, backs away from him and and pours it on her chest. Jim watches as the tiny life saving puddle slowly slides down in between her breast cleavage down her stomach and disappears into her pubic hair. She sticks her fingers in her mouth and slurps the residue up, smiles and heads for the door. Before leaving she takes one last puff of the cigarette. Then she spreads her legs in a wide stance, bends over, seductively showing her full naked ass to Jim and sticks the cigarette between her legs. Using her other hand, she grips her labia and spreads them apart and a little more piss seeps out and drips on the cigarette, putting it out. She throws it on the floor, slaps her ass with both hands, creating red hand prints on each cheek and then leaves. A second later she peeks her head back in and says:

Empress: Oh and if you lose your erection during sex tomorrow I'll see to it that you are banned from receiving urine anymore and you will die. Goodnight!

Jim: W h..wha..WHAT?!!! NO YOU CANT!!!

She slams the door shut and leaves Jim gripped in panic. That night Jim lies in a separate room, in shock. The seriousness of his performance stresses him endlessly, as he had no clue of the cost of failure. He eventually falls asleep. The next day he eats a meal and nervously awaits as the sun sets and crickets become audible. The moon takes over the night sky and shines through the small window of his room as the moment draws near. At nightfall the guard arrives and escorts Jim to Glendella's bedroom. It felt like the longest walk of his life. She shoves him inside and locks the door behind him. He looks around the quiet room in a daze, heart racing. A few minutes later he hears her footsteps approaching down the hallway.

The door opens and the empress walks in. She stares in his eyes deeply as she drops her robe and shoves him on the bed, quickly jumps on him and rips his clothes off. She begins sucking his dick, quickly making him erect. A few minutes later, she climbs on top and slides his penis inside. He is nearly overcome by the warm, wet, super tight grip of her vagina. He feels it squeeze down and lock his penis in place like a vice. He realizes the stories are true, her vagina is frightening, seemingly with a mind of its own. She begins grinding back and forth slowly and deeply. He is feeling a mix of incredible pleasure from her vagina and the pain of her big round ass squishing his body. She begins moaning deeply, breathing heavily. Her thrust increases in speed and she moans louder. Only 3 minutes into riding, she has her first orgasm. With her trembling and pausing a moment, Jim uses the opportunity to make his orgasm subside and calm his nerves. He can feel her ravenous pussy pulsating and squeezing around his member, as if trying to devour it.

After a minute she resumes riding, harder and faster, bouncing dangerously on his dick. As the night wears on, Glendella continues having orgasms as Jim takes his mind to another place to withstand the extreme stimulation and increasing pain. Jim comes very close to ejaculation several times and uses all the will he can find to hold it in. The ordeal continues on...

(1 hour and 40 minutes later...)

Somehow Jim holds on all night and eventually, the empress reaches her 9th orgasm and has 1 left. He is almost home free. His penis has gone numb from overstimulation. The empress speeds up, begins twitching and screams in pleasure one last time, finishing her 10th orgasm. Jim cries tears of relief. After the marathon sex session has finally ended, the bed is soaked from her vaginal fluid and sweat pours down her body. Jim has a slipped disk in his spine and a bruised pelvis but it is over, he has survived sex with a sexual machine.

Empress: (exhausted breathing) Well done....kid. Good job....I am impressed. My bladder is completely filled and its all yours now. Come forth so that I may bless you with my liquid medicine.

The empress climbs down and takes a wide stance. She instructs Jim to his knees. He struggles through his pain and gets off the bed slowly and kneels down and places his mouth directly against her engorged wet pussy. Glendella takes a deep breath and a moment later lets loose her famous high pressure piss straight down Jim's throat. It spills out of his mouth and runs down his torso. Glendella jerks her hips back and forth, admiring her pissing power overwhelming him. Her stream splashes back on her legs. She cups some of the piss in her hands and rubs it on her breasts and stomach, arousing herself once more. Then she places her hand on her pussy, making it split off in different directions, soaking the bed and the floor. Jim continues gulping down as much as he can as she continues her downpour.

Glendella lifts her leg up and shoves her toes inside his mouth, letting him drink the piss that is running down her leg to her foot. She seems to have an endless supply as it continues flowing full strength. She places her foot back on the floor and Jim opens his eyes and looks at her meaty pussy firing piss at him as if it is angry at him. He can see her swollen labia vibrating and flopping around as the massive stream forces its way past them. In the excitement she decides to lay down and see how high she can shoot it. Now laying on her back, the empress spreads her long thick legs wide open and shoots her stream up, making it touch the ceiling. It arcs and lands across the room and Jim races over to it to continue drinking. He stands under it, tilts his head back and lets it fall right into his mouth.

The empress pulls her lips forward, redirecting the stream to land just past her head. Jim rushes over to follow it, nearly slipping and falling from the huge puddle on the floor. He kneels down above her head to catch the piss with his mouth and she feels his penis touch her head. She grabs it and begins sucking it, both of them moaning in pleasure. The piss is now making a sharp hiss as it continues yet to rush out of her urethra at full strength and landing with a loud splashing sound as it strikes the wood floor. The entire room now reeks of a foul mix of sweat, pussy and urine. Now with a stomach full of her royal piss, Jim collapses to his hands, still in pain from the sex. The empress stops sucking him and stands up, peeing in a light trickle now.

Empress: Look at me, bitch. Up on your knees. I'm not done.

Jim pulls himself up, still on his knees and looks at her as the light stream continues falling quietly. She takes a wide stance, leans forward and makes the stream full strength again, blasting it right on his chest. Having a full stomach and still wanting to get as much of her genetically superior urine as possible, he stretches his arms out and lets her pee dowse his body from head to toe in a true golden shower. He opens his mouth for one final big gulp. The empress walks up and squats directly over him and shoves her pussy against his mouth. Her piss fills his mouth to the brim and she grabs the back of his head and presses it firmly against her, forcing him to swallow it. She looks into his eyes, on the cusp of another orgasm, causing her to produce even more urine.

Empress: Ah fuck yeah, take this gift of my urine. I command you to swallow. Parasite, I command you to leave this boys body and soul, for you must obey the boundless power of my fucking piss. Die, die, die you demon. Jimmy boy, let my warm yellow waste kill the parasite residing within you. Drown it in my powerful female urine, for it cannot withstand the urine of the goddesses. Drink from this almighty pussy. Yes baby, yes, suck on the goddesses pussy as it dispenses your vaccine from the beast holding you hostage! I now banish your demon illness into submission. My stinking piss shall follow it to hell and boil it for ALL eternity! Drink it. In the name of womanhood! Who's pussy do you love?!

Jim: (gagging) yours.

Empress: Who's pussy do you need?!

Jim: yours!

Empress: WHO'S PUSSY DO YOU FUCKING CHERISH?!!!

Jim: I CHERISH YOUR PUSSY, EMPRESS GLENDELLA!!! YOU HAVE FREED ME FROM THAT PARASITE!!! THANK YOU EMPRESS!!!

She shoves him to the floor, leans back and places her hands on her hips, her piss still gushing out full force on him as he lies in the fetal position. She looks up at the ceiling and shouts...

Empress: ALL HAIL GLENDELLA!!!

ALL HAIL MY BEAUTIFUL PUSSY!!!

ALL HAIL MY FUCKING PISS!!!

@zorba3189

Damn...that is a very dirty thing to do to someone. And to think that her roommate was eating the urine infested herbs unknowingly. That's taking it too far. Very hateful. If she had known, she could've pressed charges, its against the law to taint someone's food.

@zorba3189

I'm sure that any woman with a pee fetish is fun in bed, especially if her partner actually shares the fetish. Poor guy just couldn't get over her, happens to the best of us. I bet he's torn up now. At least you aren't with someone who isn't fully into you anymore.

@p\=eeeeee

It's really irritating how women maintain friendships while hating each other. It's so childish. But at the same time I would love to see a girlfriend do something this dirty.

@Fire2ninja

Disclaimers are a good idea. The only problem is that the elements of my stories are usually integrated very tightly. So making a potentially off putting part expendable enough that readers can skip past it disrupts this integration. For my writing style I think it would be better to just leave those bits out. It doesn't bother me. I keep myself on a tight leash anyway. At first, my femulsio eta stories were extreme enough that Steve let me know I was approaching a red line and risking removal. So I pulled back considerably. I would need to find a more extreme audience elsewhere for the sadistic stuff I think of.

Anyway thanks for reading and commenting. I got a 4.5 out of you and that says a lot because you're tough lol.:biggrin:

@Fyrman

Lol, well a woman with all of these qualities while also being girlfriend/wife material is rare indeed. Finding a woman with a pee fetish is hard enough. I hope I'm lucky enough find a woman who likes me watching her pee and maybe pee on me in the shower.

FYI I just realized when typing your name I've been calling you fryman but its fyrman. Apologies.

@Alfresco

You are correct. You would see women do all types of nasty things they really can be pigs in total privacy. See here's the thing, I used to clean the restrooms when I worked at Burger King years ago and I can tell you on multiple occasions women had literally thrown tampons on the wall and floor and left blood spatter. Shit splattered on the seat, puddles of piss on the floor, soiled tissue all over, especially if we had to serve bus loads of high school students. 30 teen girls and 2 stalls. One even shit in the sink...The womens was ready for hazmat after they left. I wrote about a female manager leaving a disgusting mess for me to clean over in the experiences section a few months ago. Privacy combined with anonymity and a toilet that is not theirs brings out the worst in womens etiquette.

With that said, I will keep writing of whatever comes to mind but it would be stupid of me to continue including things so many readers don't like. My mistake was assuming everyone here is interested in the dirtier aspects of womens restroom happenings as I am. No big deal, I can leave poop and menstrual matters out. It's not as if anyone is saying "hey man I don't like your ideas" lol. Just a few minor tweaks is all.

@zorba3189

Good that you left him. They divorced because of the infidelity not because he didn't love her anymore. She was probably awesome at sex. Women who display cruelty usually have lower inhibition in bed, its all tied to their lack of empathy. So he was probably missing the sex with her as well. One of my friends once told me that his ex was always horny after they had been hunting and killed something, especially if she shot it. This may be why so many women that hunt seem a little too excited and sexual when photographed standing over what they just killed. Anyway, hot stories.

Your stories are great and there's something for everyone, the minor parts that are not this or that person's thing do not really detract at all and they will work for others.

And you are not the only one who goes beyond the realms of pee.

I myself have occasionally included some mild scat in my Wild Girl Diaries thread, for example. And have once posted a story for a friend of mine featuring girl/daddy role play (an adult role playing a girl, let's be clear about that). At some point when I am in the right mental zone I want to write a pee story incorporating BDSM. These things will not be to everyone's taste but some will love it.

The response I got to the daddy story was similar to the responses here - some loved it unreservedly, others said that this or that aspect wasn't their thing but great story anyway.

I shouldn't worry about such responses.

Your stories are often highly original and imaginitive. I would hate to see you feel the need to rein yourself in too much. Just go wherever it takes you.

And in the above story, as a piece of fiction -regardless of erotic value - all the scenes fitted perfectly. And that's the great thing about your work. On a literary level, it always works well. And there is always more than enough in there for the erotic interest of pee fans.

Thanks I appreciate it. You know, regardless, I like how much I have evolved since my first story. It was short and simple compared to the long complex stuff I do now. Just glad people like reading it, either way.:thumbsup:

Great story and really enjoyed it, except for the used tampon bit. Not really into periods and tampons. But that's a small quibble and in terms of expressing disrespect on the part of Trish it certainly helped to emphasise that.

I've noticed a trend of people not liking certain parts of my stories. There is a disconnect between me and everyone else. I often write to include descriptions of other bodily functions and not limit it to just pee and that bothers people. I think the problem is that I am intrigued by womens toilet visit behavior in general and most readers have a very specific fetish for pee in an innocent girl being naughty way like panty peeing or something. I briefy mentioned a little poop and tampon and that seems to have partially killed it for a lot of people. So I guess I'll stop adding other stuff altogther.

Yes, great story loved it all. Except the scat part at the end. I'm not a fan of scat in any way shape or form.

Thanks Fryman, I appreciate you supporting my stories since I started. When it comes to scat I'm mostly neutral. I don't really seek it out but I'm not repulsed by it either. For me, pee is my preference but in general I like watching women voiding waste from urethra or anus. One important distinction though, I am not at all into scat playing, where women rub it all over themselves or eat it. That's just stupid gross to me personally. With Trish here, I added it for the specific purpose of showing just how hugely arrogant and disrespectful she is. Originally, when Jeremy saw her on film, she had a swastika on her ass. Her racism toward Jeremy being Jewish was going to be the reason for her cold words to him. I decided it was too much and scrapped it.

That was an incredible story I loved it

Thanks, glad you liked it.

I like how your stories involve an unassuming innocent woman pissing on/in something of value. There's the innocence, the secrecy, the desperation, the woman's arousal, the naughtiness, violation of something valuable and the pee detail itself. Lots of fetishes satisfied here.

Messy Piss of College Girls

Jeremy is a junior in college. At the end of the summer he hugs his parents goodbye and heads to the campus 2 hours away. He arrives and moves into a nice campus apartment. As he unpacks and moves his furniture in he looks across the street and sees a very hot girl moving in that he cannot take his eyes off of. She has the face of an angel. Long curly brown hair. He walks over and says hi to her and she just says her name is Trish. She didn't seem talkative, maybe the shy type, which made him like her more. After the brief exchange he continues unpacking, periodically admiring her thick shapely legs and and ass it shakes in her tight booty shorts with each step.

The first day of his economics class Jeremy takes a seat in the back. As students fill the room he is pleasantly surprised to see Trish walk in and sit up front, her tiny shorts revealing part of her ass with no underwear. He moves up behind her and strikes up conversation with her but she seems bothered by his presence.

Jeremy: Hey there, neighbor. Small world, huh?

Trish: Huh..? Oh...right.

He figures she just has first day stress and that he'll try again later. After class he asks her where she is from in an effort to get conversation started. She quickly takes her phone out and says “sorry I have to take this” and walks away. When he enters the hallway a few seconds later he sees that she is not talking on her phone as she heads for the exit. Jeremy knows at this point that she is not interested. He thinks to himself that if he is just persistent she will warm up to him because it will prove his ambition and willingness to pursue what he wants. Surely she will admire these qualities in him. Two days later in class he sits where he did last time right behind her. She comes in with 3 other girls and they sit together in the back, killing any chance of him talking to her. Jeremy decides to make one last attempt at her and walks up to her after class before she leaves.

Jeremy: Hey Trish, how about we study in the library later, I need a smart girl to help me understand this stuff.

Trish: Look, dumb ass I am not interested in you. Like how stupid are you? Why would a girl like me even talk to someone like you? The kind of guys I date are leagues ahead of you so fuck off!

Her friends laugh and they all leave. Jeremy goes home, feeling like shit and angered that she spoke to him so heartlessly. Same old story. Girls just do not like him and consistently belittle him. As the days go on he avoids her and tries to forget about her and the whole incident. 3 weeks into the semester his friend Seth is planning a party at his off campus apartment building, complete with a pool. Seth tells him that many hot girls will be there, including the hot girl across the street from Jeremy. He begins thinking about how he could stick it to her at the party. Maybe push her in the pool or slip a laxative in her drink. Or maybe catch her naked somehow. His mind ponders...

Jeremy: Wait. Trish will be there?

Seth: Yeah, yeah thats her name. Heard she dissed you mad dirty, bro. These ho's got no respect. That's why I fuck em and chuck em!! She might change her mind with a few beers in her system!! You should come J man.

Jeremy: Hey Seth...I have an idea. How do you feel about hiding a camera in the bathroom to your apartment? We can catch some nice shots of girls pussies and asses, man. Maybe it will catch that bitch, too. Then I can upload it to pornhub or something and send a link to the entire school!

Seth: Dude, that's savage as FUCK!! Go get the camera! Make sure you hide it good tho, I aint getting busted if they find that shit.

The night of the party, Jeremy comes over and installs the camera perfectly. In just a few hours, girls will be filmed showing their asses to the camera, especially Trish.

Jeremy: Alright man its ready to record. I'm controlling it so don't worry you won't be in it. Let's record some pussies.

Seth: Niiiiiice, bro!! My man Jeremy gives zero fucks up in here!! Spyin on bitches and shit!!

At 9 pm the party is on and dozens of people show up, including Trish. Soon the apartment is packed with hot girls that will be drinking and pissing like horses very shortly. Jeremy looks on as people are making out, dancing, drinking and smoking, too shy to get in on the action himself. He also kept a close eye as girls used the bathroom, making sure to trigger the camera to record with an app on his phone, ensuring no men are in the film. At the end of the night at 1 am, as most people are drunk and high, he sneaks into the bathroom, retrieves the camera and heads home to check the recordings. He transfers the file to his laptop and gets ready, hoping he will see Trish so that the entire internet can also see her. Jeremy had no idea what the camera had captured. He saw all 22 girls there piss on camera. They all pissed forcefully and long, their bladders filled with alcohol. But 7 women in particular stood out in their drunken visits to the toilet.

The 1st one of interest was a thin blonde. She comes in and hovers over the toilet and lets loose a thin but incredibly strong and focused stream that lasted for 23 seconds. Instead of slowly weakening, her stream finished in spurts, stopping and starting in quick bursts. Her tampon string hung below her pussy and got soaked under her pee. It stopped instantly, no stray drips. She hikes her jeans up, flushes and leaves.

The 2nd one, a short haired, curvy big chested Gothic brunette with face piercings, heavy black makeup, dressed in tight black leggings, flips flops and a black tank top exposing her stomach comes in holding her crotch and a bottle of beer in the other hand. She yanks her leggings down fast, aims her big round ass at the toilet and fires an inhuman gush of piss into the toilet. The pressure behind it makes it bounce against the porcelain and out of the toilet. Drops of piss are seen flying up onto the seat. After 18 seconds it stops. She moans in relief, pulls her leggings up tightly until they are wedged deep in her ass, turns her head to the side and spits a loogie on the wall. She then sticks her hand down the back of her pants and digs in her ass to reposition her thong. She takes the last sips of the beer and drops the bottle on the floor and leaves without wiping, flushing or washing her hands.

The 3rd one, a basketball player, a 5'11'' brunette with toned legs. She had on a white mini skirt, white tube top and sandals. She hovers high over the toilet and pees in a light trickle stream for 2 minutes and 13 seconds that eventually splits into 2 streams, one of which lands on the back rim of the toilet seat, missing the bowl. She pulls her panties up, flushes and leaves.

The 4th, 5th and 6th all come in together, smoking cigarettes. The first 2 pull their jeans down, hover over the toilet at the same time back to back, asses touching and piss forcefully. The dual streams hitting the water create a loud thunderous pouring sound in the bathroom as they laugh wildly. One of them stands up, turns to the wall by the toilet, leans forward and pulls her labia up, blasting the wall with piss. It stains the white paint yellow, runs down the wall onto the floor creating a massive puddle that soaks into the carpet under her feet. The 3rd among them, a red head, lifts her skirt, aims her meaty pale white ass over the sink and pisses in it. Her pee splashes up and hits the toothbrushes resting on the sink. She leans down deep, grabs her cheeks and pulls them upward, making her piss hit the sinks knobs and the wall behind it, leaving a film of piss running along the surface of the sink and down the side to the floor. Upon finishing she wipes her pussy on the edge of the sink. The other 2 take a puff, wipe and then drop the roll of toilet tissue in the piss puddle. They toss their used tissue and still burning cigarettes in the sink and all leave giggling.

The 7th was none other than Trish herself. Jeremy sits up, leans forward and turns up the sound and brightness on his screen. She came in wearing her super tight booty shorts, white flip flops and tight red sleeveless button down shirt with a folded collar. She forced the shorts off, and pulled her pink thong deep out of her flawless apple shaped ass. 2 large diamond stud piercings hung from her labia. She hovers her ass over the toilet, pulls her tampon out and throws it against the wall by the toilet. She lets free a thick yellow hissing power stream, creating a loud, deep reverberating sound in the toilet. 12 seconds in, her piercings get in the way of the stream and her piss runs down the back of her left leg and shoots far to the left, hitting hard against the seat and splattering the sink next to it. As her stray piss wreaks havoc on the fixtures, her dark colored balloon knot asshole opens up and fires a wet fart that splatters tiny droplets of shit against the back of the toilet lid.

When she finishes, she sees the toilet tissue still laying in the piss puddle. She looks around for something else to wipe with and grabs the white hand towel by the sink. She rubs her pussy with it and runs it along her ass crack, leaving yellow and brown streaks on it. She folds it back up and hangs it back on the rack. She jumps up and down as she pulls hard to get her tight shorts back up, her huge ass bouncing along with her jumps and making a clapping sound. She turns around and looks at her brown splatter on the toilet and the blood running down the wall from her tampon and smiles. She stands in the mirror, fixes her breasts and shoves her hand down her shorts to adjust her camel toe and piercings being smashed against her thighs by her tight shorts. She whips her long hair back seductively and blows herself a kiss in the mirror. Trish doesn't wash the dried discharge off of her hand from her tampon or the dried piss that ran down her leg and leaves the toilet splattered with shit and unflushed.

Jeremy: PORNHUB BITCH!!!

@Brutus TLDR = Too Long, Didn't Read.

In my opinion, both types of writing have their place. Short, sharp stories state facts and give the reader basic information. Longer stories allow the reader to immerse themselves in the story, picking up on detail and can imagine being there and watching the events unfold. I like both, but I do appreciate a bit of detail.

Yes I enjoy others' short stories as well. When I try to write a short story, ideas rush into my head and I have to keep going. Total immersion is what I aim for in mine. I like creating a detailed scenario that slowly builds to an awesome pee scene. If I do it right and the readers are into the characters and context then the pee scenes mean so much more. That's IF I can get people invested in the story, which doesn't always happen but it remains my goal. But at this point most people know what to expect from me.

Do people on the forums perfer shorter stories with a smaller focus on just one scene or a larger and more detailed and varied stories? I write for me first and foremost, so I like a believable chain of events. That also makes me feel very long -winded. I think you established a decent balance with this story. Less is more in some cases, and your mind will fill in most details with what ever excites you most as long as the action flows swiftly. That is where text has the advantage over a visual medium.

TLDR, Write what excites you and trim what doesn't.

I am sure there are people who prefer short stories and then there are those who prefer long stories. Those that like long ones will naturally drift toward writers like me, assuming they like the material to begin with. I write for me but also try to stay mindful that others are not in my head and their minds may not go where I intend if I don't fill in most of the details. I also try to avoid stretching it out too much. I am still finding my balance but I think it gets a little better with each story. The one I'm working on now is by far the longest I've written and I'm seeing if anything could be removed but there's a lot happening so I just have to trust my instincts.

Oh and what does TLDR mean?

Fire2ninja I always welcome feedback so I know how in tune I am with readers. I doubt you will anger anyone. I think we are rather cool here given this fetish. I agree 100 percent with you that the pee parts were a little thin. The thing is I try to avoid making these too long and lose someones interest. I already removed an entire paragraph before posting. This is why I had the car peeing and the food peeing as well as the urn scene to get enough pee material overall. I dont want to sacrifice buildup story either so its basically a balancing act that I am still learning. Thanks for the evaluation.