holyknight3

It is a typo, and I have no idea how to go back and fix it. Criticism would be highly appreciated. I don't think it is possible to grow without positive criticism, and the whole point of writing these stories for me is to improve my writing technique.

All of these are self edited, and I am fully aware of the problems that may arise from that. I personally feel these are little more than rough drafts, which is fine for what I'm using them as, writing practice. I have the next few sections in the raw, but I haven't even reviewed them myself yet. It is taking me longer to get to the end, or even a stopping place, than I thought it would.

This is my second attempt, and it is a bit longer. Feel free to let me know what you think, good or bad. This time I focused on Lily's roommate Sara, and I think the next piece will be something with both of them. Sara was always glad to be done with classes for the day. The few hours she got to herself in the afternoon were her favorite part of day. She loved being roommates with Lily, but the afternoon was when she took care of herself and let the stress of college be forgotten for a moment. Her roommate had sectionals, so she couldn’t be home till after 6 at the earliest, which gave

That gives me a few ideas where to go from there, I think I'll write something about her roommate next.

I have loved reading stories here over the years, and I finally decided to try my hand at writing one. Tell me what you think, good, bad, kiss my ass, derivative or what not. Lily Lily loved having the mornings to herself, because it was one of the few times she felt she could explore her own needs without fear of being judged. She rolled out of bed 5 minutes after her roommate left, to make sure she was gone, stripped out of her pajamas and headed to the shower. She turned the hot water on full for just a bit, to warm up the bottom, and then lay down in the tub, slowly running her hands

I loved both of your stories, and I'm surprised no on has commented on them before now. Good job and keep writing.