Ethan's Story (Short)

[Brutus 2,110]

Ethan's Story

When I was a kid, my mom's friend Carrie came over often. I had a serious crush on her. She's Italian. At the time, she was late thirties, and really curvy with dark blonde hair. I'll never forget her loud energetic laugh and that sweet perfume she always wore. To this day, I don't know what it was and I've never known anyone else using it but I'd recognize it instantly. Anyway one summer morning I was up early to play Gears of War. Carrie came over like usual to have a coffee with my mom, who had taken the day off work. I remember hearing them down in the kitchen talking and laughing. Dad was off to work as usual. It was one of those days where everything just felt good. I mean, summer had just started, I'd just gotten an Xbox 360 and new TV as gifts for finishing junior high school, birds were chirping away, mom and Carrie enjoying themselves, things just felt good.

It got much better about two hours later. Carrie is the type of coffee drinker to down three or four cups a day. She'd had two that morning by the time I heard her starting up the stairs with a quick pace. My mom said something I couldn't make out but Carrie laughed and said, “Woo I gotta take a piss” They have foul mouths and often use dirty language but I'd never heard her say those exact words. On top of that, I was fourteen and at the peak of puberty so hearing her say that just hit me at a primitive level and seemed hot in a strange new way. I smiled to myself listening to her footsteps flapping in sandals as she made it to the top step and power-walked past my room toward the bathroom while exhaling in discomfort. She didn't see me since my lights were off and door barely open but I saw her hand in the crotch of her shorts for that split second she was in view. I'd never seen a woman just grabbing herself down there like that but something so simple was somehow the hottest thing ever.

Then I heard the door shut. At the time, hearing women pee wasn't even on my mind as something that could be so hot, so when I heard a strange hissing noise off in the distance, I was genuinely curious as to what it was. I paused the game and got up from bed, walked out to the hall and heard it more clearly. Still confused, I followed it and sure enough it was coming from the bathroom. I stood directly outside the door listening as Carrie moaned inside. It made my spine tingle because it sounded very sexual and I'd never heard anything like that from her. At that moment, I realized that the loud hissing sound was her pee smashing hard against the water and porcelain of the bowl with unbelievable force. Up to that point, I expected that women just tinkled lightly. Carrie curb-stomped my expectations instantly. This was a woman that didn't give a shit about ladylike expectations when it came to releasing her bladder. This was no tinkle going on in our bathroom. She wasn't just using the toilet, she was using her stream to pummel it, like she was challenging it. Felt like she was being rude by pissing that hard in someone else's toilet. It varied in intensity throughout, the reverberation in the bathroom screaming when she pushed harder. I was just in shock over what I was hearing. Toward the end she was stopping and starting over and over. I remember hearing the loud gushes and then she'd moan again, then another gush and a moan, like each burst was spraying over her clit just right. My heart was racing the whole time, forgetting to breathe as I listened to her having an orgasmic flow. Carrie demonstrated to me without question, that ladylike can fuck off when a woman is having a proper piss.

When the noise stopped, I hurried across the hall to my parents bedroom and peeked through the door as she flushed and came out walking down the hall, breathing a sigh of relief on the way downstairs. When she got to the bottom step I heard her say “Damn that felt good” and my mom and her laughed. I came out and walked into the bathroom, smelling her perfume lingering and then without thinking I reached down to touch the seat since her ass was just on it. It was nice and warm were she was sitting. As if this wasn't hot enough, I happened to look over and see that she hadn't opened a new roll of toilet tissue to replace the roll I had just finished that morning, so I knew for a fact that she hadn't wiped herself and was letting her panties handle that. My crush on Carrie went straight jacket insane that day, and ever since, I've adored the sound of a woman letting loose a hard stream into a toilet.

Edited June 6, 2019 by Brutus

[Peefreak99 3,703]

That was so hot 

[nopjans 1,142]

Excellent writing as always, Brutus.

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@Peefreak99

@peeingone

@nopjans

Thank you all. I wasn't sure if something this short would work. 

Edited June 7, 2019 by Brutus

[Alfresco 10,989]

On 6/8/2019 at 12:24 AM, Brutus said:

Thank you all. I wasn't sure if something this short would work. 

Short stories can be just as entertaining and engaging as longer stories if they are of the right calibre (and this one certainly is).   Some would argue that long stories get boring whilst short stories get straight to the point.   In this one, you have given enough background to set the seen, covered the details of the main event sufficiently to conjure up the imagery and then rounded it off nicely as well.   Loved it.

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6 hours ago, Alfresco said:

Short stories can be just as entertaining and engaging as longer stories if they are of the right calibre (and this one certainly is).   Some would argue that long stories get boring whilst short stories get straight to the point.   In this one, you have given enough background to set the seen, covered the details of the main event sufficiently to conjure up the imagery and then rounded it off nicely as well.   Loved it.

I certainly understand the appeal of something short and to the point. I just got into a habit of writing long stories over the years but I decided to challenge myself with something way shorter because I have so many ideas stacking up that I'd never get to them otherwise. These have been fun and so much faster. I can deliver far more ideas like this.